In our class activities, we may be in a dilemma that whether should us insist on our original opinion or not when we have a different one? My answer is respecting the suggestions the majority of students hold.

　　Never will I forget the experience that my class planned a trip. Most reached an agreement that the A Mountain is the best choice while I firmly believe that the B Lake is better. I tried my best to persuade others but finally failed. I arrived at the destination unwillingly but to find the view seen from the mountain top was so charming that it strike to my heart! Thinking back on myself, I realized that I was too surbborn to accept different thoughts.

　　As an old saying goes like that “The minority should obey the majority”. When my opinions are different from most of my classmates, I will listen carefully and respect their views.

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　　本文语言流利，句型多样。文中运用了同位语从句(We may be in a dilemma…)、倒装句(Never will I forget…)、宾语从句(I firmly believe that…)等。同时，作者把非谓语动词形式与从句相结合，增加了句式灵活性,如Thinking back on myself, I realized that…然而，文章中也出现了一些为尽量使用高级词汇和复杂句型而导致的错误：(1)In our class activities, we…… whether should us (应改为we should) …… (2)I arrived at …… that it strike to (strike应为struck，并作及物动词使用)…… (3)Thinking back on myself (think back on sth意思是“回想过去发生的事”，此处使用语境错误), I realized …… surbborn(拼写错误，应为stubborn)…… (4)As an old saying goes like that “……” (应为As an old saying goes: “……”) 。此外，文章第二段首句“Never will I……”虽然语法上行得通，但不符合英文表达习惯。