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　　During class activities, we will inevitably encounter situations where our opinions differ from most students. From my perspective, I prefer to respect the variety originated from the following reasons.

　　Once my classmates provoked a discussion about how to spend our last yet precious activity of class before graduation. Most students chose to hold a party whereas I insisted on seeing a movie. At last they persuaded me by listing some advantages and we all enjoyed the party. Through it, the cohesion of the class was enhanced, everyone’s potential motivated and mutual trust built.

　　The impressive experience dawns on me that the variety’s opinion is what it takes to ensure their welfare. Thus it does deserve our respect as long as it is appropriate.

　　点评：

　　该文章给人的第一印象是：语言精练、句型丰富。文章的开头段和文中使用了inevitably, encounter，provoke, whereas, cohesion, enhance, dawns on sb等高级词汇，且使用语境恰当，体现了作者较扎实的语言功底。此外，文章做到了句型变化多样，首段运用了定语从句(encounter situations where …)，第二段最后一句使用了独立主格形式(everyone’s potential motivated …)，最后一段首句运用表语从句(what it takes …)。当然，文章仍有以下问题：在首段出现了originate一词的错误用法，正确形式应该是originating，属于主被动关系的混淆错误；provoke的主语搭配不妥。总体来说，文章结构完善、用词地道、句型多变，是一篇佳作。