给联合国秘书长Kofi Annan写信，阐述你对世界和平现状的看法和展望，以及对联合国发挥更大作用的期待。
范文：为了便于同学们学习，我尽量讲作文写的简单一点。
Dear Mr. Annan, Jan.8 2004-12-11
I am a college student from China, majoring in International Politics. I am honored to write to you to express my view on world peace.
In this ever-changing society, peace and development are the two permanent themes. People from around the world cherish a peaceful co-existence. However, we regret to find that world peace is in a worsening situation. Regional conflicts, miniature wars, aggressive wars and ethnic cleansing are nothing new, if not everyday occurrences. Global powers, such as the U.S., are destroying people’s faith in peace for economic or nationalistic reasons. If this undesirable trend could not be reversed, our global village, in my view, would be ruined sooner or later.
The United Nations, which is an international body coordinating a wide range of affairs, should take a leading role in bringing us a peaceful planet. I was hoping the UN, under your guidance, could do more to make our common dream – world peace – come true in the not too distant future.
Best wishes,
Respectfully yours
Zhang Ying (174 words )
gujing101：
Jan.8.2004
Mr.Kofi:
I am a college student from China . It is seen that you have done a a lot for the peace of the world ,and now the world indeed in a relative and jarless situation. But there also have many insecure factors .Just like the war in Iraq , and civil wars in some contries in Africa and South America .And some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge for the world’s peace .
So in my opinion , in the sooner days , the situation now will not have a great improvement , and the possibility of breaking out wars in some part of the world still exist .
Undoubtedly ,the UN plays a very important character in the world’s peace now .But I think the UN should strengthen it’s influence and be the main character .
Best wishes !
Yours ，
Gujing 101
错误很多吧，哪些不足，希望老师能指出来
错误：
1.and now the world indeed in a relative and jarless situation. / and now the world is in a…. situation
2.some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge for the world’s peace . / some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge to the world peace
3.in the sooner days / in the days to come
4.and the possibility of breaking out wars in some part of the world still exist / and the possibility of the outbreak of wars still exists in some parts of the world
5.the UN plays a very important character in… / … a very important part in
6.should strengthen it’s influence and be the main character. / should spread its influence and be a major force in promoting the world peace.
太阳葵新伍：
我感觉我的作文有点像trash........不过我不怕现眼，就因为差才贴出来改进^_^！
有很多不错的词汇一到写作的时候才发现，会说会看却不会写。
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前几次4级都是差2～3分就过了，是不是出在作文上呢
希望老师指点，使我进步
给联合国秘书长Kofi Annan写信，阐述你对世界和平现状的看法和展望，以及对联合国发挥更大作用的期待。
范文：为了便于同学们学习，我尽量讲作文写的简单一点。
Dear Mr. Annan, Jan.8 2004-12-11
I am a college student from China, majoring in International Politics. I am honored to write to you to express my view on world peace.
In this ever-changing society, peace and development are the two permanent themes. People from around the world cherish a peaceful co-existence. However, we regret to find that world peace is in a worsening situation. Regional conflicts, miniature wars, aggressive wars and ethnic cleansing are nothing new, if not everyday occurrences. Global powers, such as the U.S., are destroying people’s faith in peace for economic or nationalistic reasons. If this undesirable trend could not be reversed, our global village, in my view, would be ruined sooner or later.
The United Nations, which is an international body coordinating a wide range of affairs, should take a leading role in bringing us a peaceful planet. I was hoping the UN, under your guidance, could do more to make our common dream – world peace – come true in the not too distant future.
Best wishes,
Respectfully yours
Zhang Ying (174 words )
gujing101：
Jan.8.2004
Mr.Kofi:
I am a college student from China . It is seen that you have done a a lot for the peace of the world ,and now the world indeed in a relative and jarless situation. But there also have many insecure factors .Just like the war in Iraq , and civil wars in some contries in Africa and South America .And some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge for the world’s peace .
So in my opinion , in the sooner days , the situation now will not have a great improvement , and the possibility of breaking out wars in some part of the world still exist .
Undoubtedly ,the UN plays a very important character in the world’s peace now .But I think the UN should strengthen it’s influence and be the main character .
Best wishes !
Yours ，
Gujing 101
错误很多吧，哪些不足，希望老师能指出来
错误：
1.and now the world indeed in a relative and jarless situation. / and now the world is in a…. situation
2.some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge for the world’s peace . / some countries’ hegemonism is a challenge to the world peace
3.in the sooner days / in the days to come
4.and the possibility of breaking out wars in some part of the world still exist / and the possibility of the outbreak of wars still exists in some parts of the world
5.the UN plays a very important character in… / … a very important part in
6.should strengthen it’s influence and be the main character. / should spread its influence and be a major force in promoting the world peace.
太阳葵新伍：
我感觉我的作文有点像trash....
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....不过我不怕现眼，就因为差才贴出来改进^_^！
有很多不错的词汇一到写作的时候才发现，会说会看却不会写。。。。。。。
前几次4级都是差2～3分就过了，是不是出在作文上呢
希望老师指点，使我进步
Dear sir:
I’m so excited and pleased that you give me a chance to wrie to you.
As a normal people in the world,I have been concerning he peace of the world all the days.I realize that some place on earth are peaceful,developed and prosperous.But in some countries,a great number of people are still suffering from wars,disastersand disease,like Iran and Iraq.Many people were killed and more and more children lost their home and parents.The god treat his people is not fairly,I guess.
At the end of my letter,dear sir,I expect you and your organization may do more good things for your people,for the children and for the whole world.
yours S.J
错误：
1.I’m so excited and pleased that you give me a chance to wrie to you. / I am so honored to write to you.
2.As a normal people in the world / As an average people in the world
3.I have been concerning he peace of the world / I am concerned with the peace of the world.
4.some place / some places
5.suffering from wars, disasters and disease / … diseases
6.The god treat his people is not fairly / God treat his people unfairly
半只耳：
Dear Mr. Annan
I’m a college student in China. As I know, the situation of the world is very complicated.And it has been shown that war never stops in the past 10 years. Undoubtedly, most people love peace. But for the reason that no one person or country can bear being deprived of its own economical and political benefits. So the war breaks out. And what the war brings is chaos and poverty. Like in Iraq, people wherever he comes from meets danger everyday, meanwhile, many residents there are still homeless.
Sadly, in my view,the war will never stop unless the Union State play an more important role in the adjustment of many states.Of course, it is the easier said than done. But I believe that if the Union State conduct more lawful rights than before amd today, the situation of the world may be not as worse as today’s.
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Best regards.
sincerely yours
James
麻烦丁老师指导一下，谢谢哦。
错误：
1.But for the reason that no one person or country can bear being deprived of its own economical and political benefits. 意思表达不清楚。/ economic and political ….
2., meanwhile, many residents there are still homeless. / . Meanwhile,
3.the Union State / the UN
4.it is the easier said than done. / it is easier said than done.
猪外婆：
Dear Kofi Annan,
I am a student from China. I am writing to expand on my personal opinion about the situation of the world peace.
To begin with, there are some factors which do harm to the peace of world.&nb
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sp;A case in point is: a large-scale war in Iraqi is started by Bush administration. If this war enlarges, it may give rise to a comprehensive war all over the world. Undoubtedly, however, it is an inevitable trend that peace is socially acceptable. The myriad of people have the idea that we need a peaceful environment. Additionally, an army of American citizens accuse Bush of setting armies to Iraqi.
On my personal level, the United Nation must take a leading role to medicate the conflicts of the world. And dear sir, as a peacemaker, you should be respected by a multitude of people. It is beyond doubt that the period of war is coming to an end and a whole new era of lasting peace will turn up. I am fully convinced that you can evoke support of all the countries. I am hoping that the peace of world will come true early.
Respectfully yours,
ZWP
错误：
1.to expand on my personal opinion / to express my opinion
2.started by Bush administration. / launched by the Bush Administration
3.If this war enlarges, / If this war escalates,
4.setting armies to Iraqi / sending troops to Iraq.
5.must take a leading role to medicate / must take a leading role in mediating
Blonde：
November 8,2004
Dear Kofi Annan,
As everyone knows,It is vitally important for people to maintain world’s peace and maintain peaceful relations is duty by The United Nations .
However,most country at war and the people at deep fire and water now. such as Iraq war at current ,whenever i am think this,my heart is very ache .I am worry about this people.
So ,I think it necessary to do maintain peaceful relations .
At that time, I am ask you to rescue that people .so that this people are gain freedom. and I hope maintain peaceful relations by The United Nations.
Yours faithfully,
blonde
错误：
1.Dear Kofi Annan / Dear Mr. Kofi Annan
2.It is vitally important for people to maintain world’s peace and maintain peaceful relations is duty by The United Nations / it is vitally important for people to maintain the world peace, and the maintenance of it is a duty of the UN.
3.most country at war and the people at deep fire and water now. such as Iraq war at current / most countries are at war and their people live in hot water, such as the current Iraq War.
4.my heart is very ache / my heart aches
5.I think it necessary to do maintain peaceful relations ./ I deem it necessary to maintain ….
6.I am ask you to / I am asking you
7.so that people are gain freedom / so that people will gain freedom
8.I hope maintain peaceful relations by The United Nations. / I hope that the UN will contribute more to the main
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tenance of ….
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